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Oh, exactly! I have never heard of it being pronounced that way! Yes, I love your emphasis! I hope to share today’s sentence (with credit given to you), with my students.

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Thank you for this. I love that you, as a fiction writer are so aware of sounds. You are teaching me (a poet) about plosives. Love how you talk about hard stresses. Please correct me if I'm wrong--but I don't think "tanks" would be included in the assonance--since assonance, too, is about sounds. The long _a_s and not the short _a_ in "tanks." And, yes, congrats on the Pushcart.

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Nov 18, 2022Liked by Nina Schuyler

Since reading thus, have used this idea twice in my revision. Thanks!

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This sentence is among my favorites yet. Personification of the abstract produces fascinating results.

Congrats on the Pushcart nomination!

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Nov 13, 2022Liked by Nina Schuyler

A pretty darn perfect sentence, if you ask me. Love the noir mood and tone.

Congratulations on the Pushcart nomination! Somewhere around here I have an astonishing Pushcart anthology lying in wait.

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